英语写作中的举例论证常见问题以及修改方案技巧

赛拓昂斯

武汉赛拓托福讲师Olivia老师告诉你的写作中的举例论证常见问题以及修改方案技巧

据武汉赛拓托福培训的Olivia老师所言，所有考托福的同学都知道，论证的重点一定是举例子，但举例子不是只把for example, for instance这样的表达摆出来，或者编一个英文名字就可以了，还需要注意一些其它方面。一般说来两种例子比较常见，一个是名人名言，再就是个人事例，即用自己或身边的人来举例，这一类的事例具备很强的代表性，并且能在一定程度上唤起考官的共鸣。

但对于大多数备考时间比较紧的赛拓考生来说，准备第一种例子性价比不高，并且时间不够。因此，性价比较高的第二种例子更适合于备考时间比较短的考生。托福考试仅仅是语言能力考试，只要能用恰当的例子论述清楚问题就可以，因此用生活常事来举例对于考官来说也有很大的说服力。但是恰好在这个方面容易出现一些问题：

1. 无关细节太多

For example, my uncle works in a bank, and when he was just qualified for the job, he was only responsible for counting money, the bank does not trust him to do some complicated work and interpersonal relationship, even though he is already studied in university. People always worry about young people make error, so they tend to assign more complicated work to more experienced people, not only in work but also in life, people like listen to the old people’s opinions.

以上这段我们理解起来不难，但是问题是他讲到的诸多细节，如just qualified for the job， counting money等都和主题关联不大，所以在改进时需要重新梳理内容，

For example, as a freshman in the bank, my uncle started as the cashier on the counter, although he was graduated from the top university in China. The reasons might be multiple, but the most important one would be the lack of experiences and practice. Therefore, many of the administrative jobs require the employers to start from the elementary level.

2. 只会举个个例

For example, my friend Rocky has a mechanical project. He should makes a robot, and this project needs not only professional physics knowledge but also computer knowledge, so he join a robot group to finish his project.

首先需要明确一点，托福考试是可以举个人化的例子的，但是个人化的例子并不能算得上是上策，根本原因还是看起来不太高级，所以如果例子的重点不在个人，那么武汉赛拓的老师建议你改换成下面这种是不是更好呢？

For many of the group project, especially the complicated one such as making a robot, all the team members have to work together and contribute their specific knowledge, so the work could be done.

所以如果可以把握上面说的那些方面，相信大家在论证方面会更进一步。